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Soporific, sublunary lassitude
Peregrination--pusillanimous metempsychosis
Pilfering roe, abed
Pinions, sprockets, fabulous vise
Boobs.
...

(this is dedicated to *tearstone for more than one reason) (no, it's not two reasons; but that was a good pun, yes, have a cookie.)
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sisterjanet Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2005
I actually knew a lot of these words already! and I recognised the ones I didn't know yet!

In the future, to add to the challenge of making coherent vocabulary poetry, you might want to work on getting the sentences to sound more like real sentences, or, for extra challenge, to sound more like poetry sentences.
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sankatze Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2005
I know exactly four words of it, and I have a 300 TOEFL score.
And I'm fucking NOT going to tu.dict.chemnitz for this one. :shakefist:
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danielzklein Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Use [link] like all the good kids (munich >> chemnitz)
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sankatze Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2005
Hat Leo auch 'n Firefox-Search-Plugin? Hmmmmm.... SMS-Abfrage. Fancy. Werd's gleich mal abchecken und vielleicht - gaaanz vielleicht - dieses Unding an Gedicht versuchen zu dechiffrieren. Wo wir grad dabei sind, gibt's ein Online-Dictionary mit Audio-Feature?

Wollte mir schon fast die CD-Rom Edition vom Webster bestellen, aber amazon.com liefert anscheinend keine Software nach Old Europe. Jerks.
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danielzklein Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Alles was ne input box hat kannst du firefox hotwiren; und zwar: rechtsklick, add a keyword for this search. Ich benutz "leo" fuer leo; duh! ;P Also geh ich einfach in die Location Bar (ctrl+l) und schreib "leo platzhirsch" und schon weiss ich immer noch nicht wie ich das auf Englisch sage. ;P

[link] hat sehr oft audio dabei. [link] auch. Das waere dann das Webster; Merriam-Webster that is.

Ich hab mit dem Gedanken gespielt mir OED online zu abonnieren. Aber Scheisse, so viele Nieren wie die dafür wollen hat kein Mensch.
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sankatze Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2005
Danke für den Hinweis! Anscheinend haben sie sich sogar schon mit Google verbündet, was "Platzhirsch de-en" sogar von der Google-Box zu einem nutzlosen Ergebnis liefern sollte.... nur bei mir nicht. Egal. Deine Version ist eh viel besser.

Ich denke, die Online-Version vom Webster tut's für mich im Moment... genau, was mir gefehlt hat! Hätte nicht gedacht, dass der Audio Stuff bei denen umsonst ist.

:sing: Did you ever know that you're my heeeeroooo...
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sanatae Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2005
was there any intention to the selection of tongue-twisty big words? Or just liked the way they sounded together?

To me, it seems to be a joke-type thing. So much intelligent thought process, big words, add a little mechanics and it's still intelligent, but no matter how smart, how knowledgeable, how many big words you know and can use successfully, Boobs are still Boobs.

that a decent enough analysis for ya? ^_^
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danielzklein Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
This is "vocabulary poetry", a category =IfrozenspiritI and I have invented. The predominance of expensive words is exactly the point.

And yes it's joke; I like poking the poets.
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sanatae Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2005
it's fun. ^_^
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blindsuperhero Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2005
vise : To examine and indorse, as a passport; to visa
which is a verb in any case. Did you perchance mean "vice"? (I think vise might be an american variation though)

In this I knew all words except "metempsychosis" and "vise" (in the sense defined above, that is. I know what "vice" means). Again this poem doesn't actually make any sense.

Pusillanimous is my favourite word.
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danielzklein Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
vise also vice Audio pronunciation of "vise" ( P ) Pronunciation Key (vs)
n.

A clamping device, usually consisting of two jaws closed or opened by a screw or lever, used in carpentry or metalworking to hold a piece in position.

And they ARE fabulous, no discussions there. ;P
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blindsuperhero Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2005
Vise is definitely a solely American variant, or at least very very rare in English
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triggerfinger Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2005
the words are big. like boobs. ok not ALL boobs are big, but I can fantasize or something.


pusillanimous this word was particularly filthy.

i mean say it VERY slowly and then wink at yourself in the mirror. you'll feel so dirty you'll have to shower :faint:

lol i consider myself to be pretty fluent in English but i had to look up some of the words. i like that!
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danielzklein Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Matter of fact, this poem consists almost only of words I've had to look up during my reading of Washington Irving's SKETCH BOOK. Very good book, highly recommended ;)
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TheCuddlyDevil Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2004
I literaly checked every word in the dictionary, which is pretty much more than enough to kill the enjoyment in the thing.

Oh, and there was one word I didn't need a dictionary for, do you know which one it is?
















































































That's right, peregrination.





laugh.
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demonlight Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2004  Professional Writer
The sleepy creature lies with insouciance underneath the moon. My interpretation: A young thing, already indifferent to the wonders of the world - decides to steal things to spice up his life. In doing so, he deprives the deu ex machina of it's parts, and 'boobies' is his immature expression of dismay upon the realisation that the entire world is falling apart.
There, that's my analysis.

You may laugh.
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danielzklein Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, and "its" :devilish:
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demonlight Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2005  Professional Writer
Leave me alone :fear:
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:icondanielzklein:
danielzklein Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Oh don't worry; I'll only haunt you in your dreams forever.
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danielzklein Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2004  Hobbyist Writer
That's correct, except for the deus ex machina part. That was actually a toaster.

A-
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Sonneillon- Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2004
HAHAHAHHAHA!!!!!!!!!!

Pinions! ^_^; SPROCKETS!!!!

okay i'm done.
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Saphirre Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2004  Professional Photographer
*laughs histerically* :D that's great!
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Iwon1 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2004
Yes. Something like that.


*backs away*
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kwazo Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2004   Writer
*Goes to dictionary.com

*Is a little kaffuzled

Sounds good!
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psychodrive Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2004
:P Having used the dictionary to read most of the first half I thought it was about eagles that can't sleep and like to steal fish eggs and assorted mechanical thingies.

heehee.

ah, humanity, so fickle.
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EndersShadow Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2004
good GOD!
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futilitarian Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2004   Writer
A NUDDIE!!
FILTH PORNOGRAPHY< VILE OUTPOURIMGS OF SATNS: OWN NETHER REGIONS.

I APLLAUD YOU, SIR.
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zyphryus Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2004
sprockets seem important to you currently. tell me more...
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Heh, very nice. The ridiculously large words certainly add to the humor (as opposed to normal large words, which are generally the ones used in these type of poems).
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xonlyindreamsx Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2004
Perky.
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PerfectionistApathy Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2004
you stylish fiend
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:iconaneutralshadeofblack:
Soporific, sublunary lassitude
Peregrination--pusillanimous metempsychosis
Pilfering roe, abed
Pinions, sprockets, fabulous vise
Boobs.


It sounds strangely... jerky, I guess - sound-wise, I mean. I'd need a dictionary and about eight hours more of sleep that the one and three quarter hours of it that I've had today for the vague notion of deciphering it even coming anywhere near my subconscious.
Are my sentences alright?
That wasn't very constructive criticism, eh? Oh, well - j'ai fait ce que j'ai pu...
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danielzklein Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2004  Hobbyist Writer
Mon ami, just in case you haven't figured it out, 'tis a joke! It's a grand Schenkelklopfer.

Here's a line by line translation into ... english:

Tiring, worldly tiredness
Very long journey--timid transition of a soul from a dead body into a newborn baby
Young deer which steals small things in small amounts, lying in bed
PINIONS! SPROCKETS! FABULOUS VISE! (you'll have to look those up yourself; they're all mechanical parts)
Titties.

That's what it says. I'd REALLY love to read a full analysis of that thing; if no one does it, I'll write one myself at some point.
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:iconaneutralshadeofblack:
I still stand by what I said: I will get a complete analysis of this to you, I swear. :D
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danielzklein Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Stiiiiiiill waiting.
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danielzklein Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Still waiting.
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saintartaud Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2004  Professional General Artist
them's boobs alright!
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:iconboconashi:
boconashi Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2004
TITTIES!!! :D
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stornn Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2004
Rathar Kinkah
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mistseeker Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2004  Professional Writer
I didn't get a fucking word of it!
(But then again, I'm totally drunk now!)

Nek.
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Disate Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2004
Oh, my side hurts from laughter, and it is all your fault!!!
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tearstone Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2004
yeeaaaah, boy

<grins>
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:iconinebriate:
inebriate Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2004
hawt.
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sumants Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2004   Writer
pornographer! pig fucker!
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TheBunk Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2004   Writer
A Critique from a Depressed Teenage Goth

wow. your really good at poems. i'm just sitting hear reading poems because its a shitty day and i wish it would just end. my hole family just went to burger king but im to sad to eat. do you have n e other poems like this? if i can't feel better i might as well feel bad.

i'll anser your poem with one that i just wrote hey! i'm a poet and i didnt' even kmow it!

black thorns in my side
you left me alone
i sit in my pain
alone like falling rain
please just come back
let me feel your touch
i am alone.

pretty good,huh? hey if you wanna chat or osmething, drop me a note you seem really kool!

~debbie

End of teenage goth critique
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danielzklein Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2004  Hobbyist Writer
poopedmapants.
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triptychr Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2004  Hobbyist Writer
I love it when you talk dirty.
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g33k-ch1k Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2004   Writer
i laughed, a lot.
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danielzklein Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2004  Hobbyist Writer
It seems we like each other's poetry :D

I'm certain I laughed more while writing this though :P The image of bambi lying in bed with the little baubles she stole (bauble was originally in the poem as well, but hey, I've done some revising already! ;p).
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